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Reviewer: EliteWarrior Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Jan 26, 2005 9:53 PM Title: Shadow Revealed

EEEEEEK!1 *ahem* Very...gory. And I agree with Jim. Fantastic storyline, but scary/frightening stories always end better when you find out about the cloaked figure at the end. Meh, whatever, I'll believe about your "More twists" thing. I thought for a long time, but I chose 10/10. Why? Because you were willing to try a new type of story writing than what most people use. Although I hated Vanilla Sky, your back-and-forth storyline makes much more sense.

Author's Response: Well, to tell you all the truth, I've been going back and forth between releasing the infamous "chapter zero" aka, "intro" that you all have been somewhat complaining about. In the end, I've decided to go with my instincts and let you know beforehand who the "cloaked figure" was. I thought it would help draw you in, since you know what would happen...just not how.

Reviewer: Quite_Gone_Jim Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: Jan 26, 2005 4:35 AM Title: Shadow Revealed

Pretty good, though, it lacks a certian amount of tension, or suspence. In the first chapter you find out straight away who the cloaked figure is. I find it would be better if you put in the scene where Link discovers what Zelda is doing before Saria reveals her alternate universe idea. It would just be a bigger shock, if you understand me. I know its just the beginning but try to hold back the revealing of information until the climax so its like a big twist. I find stories like that are the best. Awseome idea though. 9/10.

Author's Response: Thanks, don't worry too much there will be WAY more twists coming soon. hahaha! And when the story does end, I'm looking for this response: "Oh...I see!! THATS what happened!! COOL!" if not, then I have failed as an author ^.^;;

Reviewer: Burn Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Jan 19, 2005 10:39 PM Title: Shadow Revealed

My god... unbelivably frightening...



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