Hey, I resent your profile bio, you just posted this story, no need to get too pessimistic. And this on is great! I do like how your going into closer detail of the Kopkiri and their life, it makes it alot more personal and not so washed up as many OoT adapts are. Lets see this story get out of the forest! Only one that I've actually found ever got finished, and it was okay, but this looks awesome. Again, theres the squishyness of the paragraphing, try double spacing your paragraphs so they have space in between, it makes it look a bit drawn out, but is far easier to read. Infact, try copying your text into a word document before you post it to scan for ity grammer stuff that is rathe inevitable otherwise. Then paste it back into the text box. Nothing big, just some pointers, just keep em coming, great work!

Author's Response: Thank you for your advice (I will make some changes to the text) and your positive response. Thanks! ^_^