personally, i didn't notice any mistakes (but that's b/c i just rush through stuff) it's a bouncy little ditty that made me want to sing! lalalalala....(10/10)

Author's Response: its coz i changed it fromt he caps to lower case! lol but im glad you liked it! i sent it to my best mate and she hated it. =( but im glad you do =)

For me, as long as I understand it, it's good enough. I luv the flow you have, it's goes a lot smoother than most others [mine included >.< ] I'll give ya a...10/10.

Author's Response: ahh your so sweet! thanx! my pc has a virus at the moment (im on a mates pc) and i havnt been able to post more stuff. im glad you liked it!

It's good, but it needs a little work. For instance, you forget to capitalize I in I'll, and you forget the apostrophe too. Try to avoid all caps (last line), and just one exclamation point is fine. Otherwise it's a good poem!

Author's Response: thankee but i think ill leave it as it is! ^_^