Reviewer: Spencer Serra Signed [
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Date: Jul 07, 2007 3:21 PM
Title: Chapter One: Hyrule Falling Apart
You need to put more periods in there dude. There are waaay too many run-on sentances. Also- where's Llia? Isn't Link in love with Llia in TP? I'm also not so hot on the "ganon returns" thing, cause there are so many of those fan fics out there already. I hope you don't consider this flaming you, because I'm not trying to. If I am, I apoligize.