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Reviewer: Lord Augustus Signed starstarstar [Report This]
Date: Mar 11, 2004 12:34 PM Title: the discovery

Nice plot, but your spacing is WAY off. Start a new paragraph whenever a new person starts speaking. No two people should have their dialogue in the same paragraph.

Author's Response: Thanks alot, Lord Augustus for the comment I will fix that soon

Reviewer: DarkSlayer 124 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Mar 11, 2004 8:39 AM Title: the discovery

I hope you like my story any constuctive critisism is requested and any ideas I might add. Thanks



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